aw another nice and cute story ^^

good story, but i wish the plot was a little more thought out.

so sad its over but it was amazing

love it

who~
at the beginning rocks(:
lol
nice story
:D

i lavv the ending and all! but i hope you could have prolong it though..

more of caleb i guess...

anyway, i lavv the story:)
keep it up:)

Wow. This is a complete, and poorly written, rip-off of Em Wolf's original story. You even had the audacity to use "Keegan", the name of Em Wolf's main male character.

Grow some originality, or atleast give her credit for the plot and depth, as well as personality, of the characters. Your story pales twenty shades compared to hers.


- Missy Ma.

AH! At the beginning! i want this song at my wedding too!! its so perfect!!

no offense,
but you have put so many grammatical errors in this, i was really annoyed by the fifth chapter.

also, if they're so rich,
why would they be saying, 'This is pretty expensive, but its worth it dont you think?'

Half of the stuff in here doesnt make any sense.

But, not to be completely negative,
The story has a really good plot, just some of the words are a bit jumbled.

:)

Um...

Sheik is an Arab chief. I think what you meant when you described her hair as sheik is "chic".

The plural form of fantasy is fantasies, not "fantasy's".

I'm finding Chase and Harper's conversation kind of overly scripted. I know that conversations in stories created by authors are technically scripted, but the characters should still seem like REAL people, not just puppets (or imaginary people); therefore, the conversations should still seem spontaneous and unplanned. The conversations should still sound natural.

Secondly, there's some really bad grammar errors flying around eveywhere in just this first chapter. For example, (this is something Harper said) "Don’t you even care about love? I mean I want that fairy tail(By the way, this word should be spelled as "fairytale".) wedding looking into the eyes of my prince. Laugh all you want but that is what girls dream for." The second sentence could be improved by phrasing it this way, "Laugh all you want but that is what girls dream OF.". Your usage of "for" was wrong in that sentence.

I'm really sorry, but the tons of grammatical errors in your first chapter have already put me off reading your story further.

I had just wanted to correct you on some of your errors because they were so blatantly wrong. I hope you take this as constructive criticism and work on improving your writing style.

Holy Crud! It's over!That's depressing...

Hah! Thats what she gets!

So I read the title an' was like what Trojan Man? but now I know why...

heii Lov ur Story
so good and Romantic
Lol anyway Loved it

I thought this was gonna be all sucky and OMG I have to marry him or I will be banished! But no you made it really good! I love the name Harper! And I love her 'virgin' computer,lol. But does evrything in her room have to be PURPLE? I hate purple with a passion,dang alliteration.