Oh... that's beautiful. It's kind of bittersweet and I really like the lines about the butterfly. It's good. :) -Qzie

Hmm interesting. Some phrases seem a bit random, but I still enjoyed it. Great job. Write on!

Anna

I like this poem,especially the line "but I prefered to throw my innocence away instead of giving her a smile."Really nice!

but the cold I feel/it's from my inside... eitehr put a comma after feel or change it's to is

I can't get to hold myself/my hands are trembling/...I can't get ahold of myself;/my hands...

brushing my doll's hair/it wasn't soft like yours/and the woman in the streets... hair;it... yours. And

I love in the beginning the cold is burning you. That was nice. The whole butterfly and doll thing was interesting, especially the ending. I also love the part about throwing your innocence away instead of giving her a smile. Those were really awesome lines.