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| abby2read 2008-06-01 ch 14,  | abusenice. please read my story will you, its called Azrath |
| FlamingFlie 2008-05-09 ch 12, | abuseSorry that it took so long to review (finished one of my AP exams... God Bless)... Like your chapter though, although it is rather short, I still rather enjoyed it! ~Flamingflie |
| Asherah Seirei 2008-05-07 ch 1, | abuseOh, school. What fun. ^^ I like Ethan and Bret, especially Ethan. It's a bit hard to tell who's talking, though... Even though this chapter was a short one I became rather confused at certain points, especially about the dialog. Plot seems really cool, so far. Hope it continues somewhere amazing. I'm interested in seeing some of the characters. =^^= |
| adams 2008-05-03 ch 11, anon. | abuseyour book could probably use more action, not that the first couple chapters look bad, just keep it coming |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-30 ch 11, | abuseVery amusing... and poor Ethan (or lucky Ethan, whichever he prefers)... Drake and David your troublemakers then? Other than the chapter being pretty short and semi-eventless, it was pretty good. Update soon. ~Flamingflie |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-30 ch 10, | abuseGo newt girl! Sorry I haven't reviewed recently (I'm going to be kinda pushed back until finals are over... it's officially the month of hell in a couple of days)... but other than my problems, great chapter and updated scheduele (sp), you really get them out fast. I like your group arrangments as well and the introduction of Drake. I will now read on. ~Flamingflie |
| Charlie 2008-04-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseI think that overall this is a really good story, and the charcters are interesting. I would agree with the other reviewers in terms of your tendency to narrate rather than reveal things through the charcters. I think the class are very well imagined, and I can't wait to find out what happens next! |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-27 ch 9, | abuseYou used my characters! *insert manically happy laughter here* Sweet, and you even kept the newt around Bunko's neck... Thanks! Tis' makes me extremely happy! On the other hand, good chapter, even though it was mainly explainations, I really did like it and want to hear more from thou soon! ~Flamingflie |
| Dragonfire411 2008-04-26 ch 8, | abuseThis is a great story. ^_^ I just posted something of my own. Check it out sometime. Continue writing and good luck on future writings. |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 8, | abuseI guess that's eight more reivews in the boat... and still needing characters eh? Here we go: Katsu: Hot tempered and normally in a foul mood because of all the low scores he receives on exams, however he’s an amazing chef. Goro: Haruko’s older brother, he’s extremely tall and tan in contrast to his little sister. Unfortunatly he has a rather large rear, which is made fun of constantly. Bunko: mischievous girl, who ordinarily sleeps constantly in class and keeps a pet newt inside of a jar around her neck. (Red/brown hair and brown eyes) Fuji: Slightly masculine, she has a unibrow, but because of her hot body, is still followed around everywhere by boys. She has a lisp. (black bristly hair and brown eyes) Haruko: Shorter than nearly all her classmates, she’s louder than all of them combined. She enjoys scaling walls, playing with matches and laughing at dead baby jokes. (Light fluffy blond hair and blue eyes) (Course you don't need to use any of them... and you can pick and chose names and such and just use descriptions or vice versa... I don't know if the link at the bottom will show up, but it's an amazing Japanese name site) ~Flamingflie /female_japanese_names.htm |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 7, | abuseGia eh? Hm.. interestig characters... I've always wanted to have green hair. Will read on now! ~Flamingflie |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 6, | abuseFrom experience, getting hit on the head with concrete like material hurts like hell... ~Flamingflie |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 5, | abuseA shade? Coolio (although I think you accidently put a W in front of word Roar)... very mission impossible like ('tis a compliment). ~Flamingflie |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 4, | abuseNames and stuff for characters? If you still need some Idea's PM me... as for the chapter, it was suprising, and two guns is completely macho... I wish I could properly wield two guns... ahh, no matter. ~Flamingflie |
| FlamingFlie 2008-04-26 ch 3, | abuseIt's the end of the world as we know it!! Sorry... Listening to music... I love the name Ethan, always been a favorite of mine... ~Flamingflie |