I sent you a note with some suggestions, so hopefully that will help!
Later,
Danielle

This sound like a good start to a story. You have alot of spelling and grammatical errors.

I have a couple of suggestions, hopefully you won't take offense
The wicked surfer crashes upon the Krystle sand of marina beach.
"crystal sand of the Marina Beach"

The sun shown brightly in the sky however the air was still bitingly cold.
"sky, however the air" or you could use a semicolon and comma here

where I cut and gut fish all day
"where I clean and gut"

fish all day, and when I'm lucky I work the boats, as captain of the cleaning crew.
I would leave out the and and just start a new sentence with When I'm lucky

That's just your first paragraph, there are many more errors along the same line all the way through your story.
Please don't think I'm being overly critical, I just think you could make your story alot better, I like the theme and am interested in what will be happening next.

Danielle