awe, that's soo sad, i was bored, so i figured i'd review some of your old stuff for fun:) Essie

I really like the way you built up the suspense with this. The repetition of the italics helped it along. Although there was one paragraph where you used 'dark' a lot to contrast with there being light and hope. I thought you over used it, but that's just my preference.
Really enjoyed reading this though, it makes it more interesting that it's a one shot and we don't really know who the people are or exactly what has happened. I like things like that when you are left to fill in the blanks for yourself.

"up a expressionless face"

a should be 'an' - there are a couple other little things like that. I think this is pretty good. It could flow better at times. The beginning where (I assume) 'she' trips is awkward in the writing. "made me trip" could be something else...
'tripped me up'
'tripped me'
?? something else? Not sure. Just the hurriedness and defiance seems to be broken by giving the root the power. It made her trip. The root has the authority the way it is written.

I know that's nit-picky and I mention it only because I like this very much. It has a lot of strength and courage. It carries me along, wanting to know what will happen.

Of course, I am curious still - who? why? etc.. but that's okay to leave me guessing.

Good job.

OH MY GOD.
I love this!
It's sad even though i dont know the caracters!
I love the the end.
Wild horses can't drive me away. oh yes they can.
:( *suddenly sad and imagining a plot behind yur story*
*sigh*

LOVE IT!
MAKE MORE ONE-SHOTS!!
Rozzie