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| electric feel 2008-06-12 ch 1,  | abuseall the items you mention (this is almost like a poetic list of signifigant objects) are beauitful. spring cleaning them out for new ones. |
| Arcane D. 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseand she smolders indeed... this was a refreshing change of pace compared to many of the angsty stuff we get on fictionpress. an interesting selection of words and thoughts all placed effectively. i look forward to reading more of your stuff and seeing you update. added you on my author alert list. arcane |
| One-Hand Clap 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseI love the imagery evoked in this poem, just as well as I like the beginning - it's such a refreshing and unique approach, and for a certain amount, it threw me. So I really admire you for that. Throwing me... Haha, I'm delerious. Don't listen to me. However, I found this line: around me the snows are melting Could you possibly mean 'snowflakes'? Or maybe 'the snow is melting'? Or is this some word play I don't get? I can be kinda dense, sometimes! I thought the ending was perfect, and so universal we can all relate as females. 'i need to spring clean my life' Brilliant! - Clap Trap from Review Marathon, link in my profile |
| Her Wishing Well 2008-04-16 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. I love the title and the lines "I imagine myself curling around him like a cat, on april afternoons" peace,love and light. |
| the twilight here 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abusei don't really read many poems (im lazy) but i liked this. i liked how it was paced and i certainly like the idea of "alleyways of my mind" and "spring cleaning my life." good job, will keep an eye out in the future. thankyou for your review, as well. |
| painted.music 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abusekonnichi wa You know what I love most about your writing? It's that your imagery is just so... YOURS. No one else would come up with such metaphors, similies, etc. I was just thinking about that from the words: "the alleyways of my mind are cluttered with / lost flyers, abc gum and decaying leaves." Really, no one would ever write that besides you. And it just works with you. It's who you are. I love it. :D Ha det -Shan- |
| fairytale failure 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abuseI love all the great words you used in this poem - every line described everyday objects to get your point across. My favourite lines were 'i imagine myself curling around him like a cat/on april afternoons/before life got so complicated.' Thats a great simile. |
| kloun doll 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abuseI like the imagery is just wonderful the way of the feelings. |