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| Max Radio 2008-07-07 ch 1,  | abuseAt the end, you wrote "does" as "dose" Otherwise, I can only comment on your excessive use of --, which annoyed the hell out of me. That must have been on purpose...The Her is so smart otherwise, I was kind of surprised. Especially after a day of wading around in Young Adult trying to find something C2 worthy...you may have just inspired me to read some more of Humor. Hopefully they're all as clever as you are...you smarmy devil...please hold me so that some of your smart can rub off... Ha ha, just kidding. That's creepy. ... ...actually, I'm not. Anyway, please take the "I think" off of the bottom line and continue The Her for future enjoyment. A big thank you from a reader who enjoyed this a little too much. 8.5/10 |
| Andrea Lotte 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseHahahahahaha, I really like this. It's realistic, too. I love they way they talk. But one bit I didn't like was the part where they're all talking and it's a bit like a script...from the "gross" bit to "you know I'm thinking about going into acting." The script-like style seemed a bit incongruous and not as sophisticated as the rest of it. But other than that, it really made me chuckle (loved the bit where Philip says Henry thinks Elijah Wood is imaginary.) Hope to read more! |