Bwah that was just beautiful, poor david :( I'm glad he got his happy ending. Definitly my favorite of your stories :)

That was a truly emotional trip.. and David's slipping grasp on sanity was really palpable... Even though I was merely an "observer" I felt like I was also losing grip on reality.

I kept hoping Philip would wake up, walk right in and save the day. But of course things weren't fine even after he came back. :)

This story's conclusion was very satisfying to read and the whole buildup towards it made it worth the while.

Oh My God. This story and each chapter are all filled with so much pain and so much emotion it kills me.

I can't say my review will merit half as much as the reviews of those who do write on this site, but this story was just gorgeous. Obviously, the whole crux of the story was David falling apart and everyone else handling it with far, far too little care, but you managed to capture that so beautifully that even if it was painful and terrible it was still so, so perfect.You managed to describe the pain he was in with such detail that I couldn't help but feel angry at everyone else(except Richard) for underestimating its depth. I liked that even though David had been raped (that, I didn't like), his grief was never about that, but about that gaping hole Phillip had left, because it wasn't really about the evil that had been done to him. I mean, obviously David was a victim, but you didn't go on stating that redundantly, you *showed* that, which is a hurdle that most people who write Angst can't seem to overcome.
Also, I believe you captured David's anger toward Katie spot-on towards the end (and mine, as well actually), because he deserved to be angry, and I liked how he didn't forgive her immediately, because quite frankly she didn't deserve to get off that lightly, whatever her reasons for deceiving him were.
Sorry about the long review, especially how conspicuously empty it was of any constructive criticism, but I honestly didn't see anything wrong, at all, with this story. Its not so much feedback as adulation, but you wanted reviews! :)

You captured all the emotions so poignantly! **, but this story is gorgeous, and that's really all I have to say.

oh wow. i do have to say that this was a lot more intense than LoE. i think i cried in every single chapter. but what i cried over? God, i cried over their loyalty and love for each other. well moreover david's love and loyalty to philip.

i think most people would be more horrified over both their dark pasts, but i think what i really focused on was their love. it was just so ** incredible and so damn beautiful, i cry over it.

but what i missed most in this fic, was philip. i missed his bantering with david (as they did in LoE).

at least, they had their happy ending, the one philip had promised them. and that's all that matters. bravo.

You are an amazing writer. Usually, when a writer gives their characters so many issues, it comes off as affected at best, and cringingly bad at worst. The fact that you're an amazing author means that you can handle it.

Your characters are so multi-faceted that even though I feel like I should hate some of them, or adore others, there is always something to temper that; to make them human. Hopefully you'll write more in the future because I'd love to see what else you can do :]

First of all, let me just emphasize how MUCH I loved and enjoyed reading this. The words flowed so beautifully, and quite expertly, when I read this piece.
And no matter how full of angst and depression and harmful things it became it was never -too- much, but just enough to send me spiralling into heartbreak over and over again. I love David as a character with all his ghosts and skeletons, and his pain.
You must have a lot of patience to be able to write this through, and I admire your skill.

Absolutely beautiful.

-Kanilla

kudos on writing such a beautiful & poignant story. It brought tears to my eyes. Thank you.

thank you thank you thankyou thankyou! it was so good, i absolutly love this story!

sequal?

It was pretty good. You did a fine job of carrying the angst right through to the end of your story.

happy fuzzy endings?
Sure! happy fuzzy ANGSTY endings.

This story is amazing. Beautiful writing. It's made me cry a number of times while reading it. I've actually quoted it before. (People look at me like I'm nuts because of it, but whatever.) Write the next part quickly, please.

oh thank god! please please please have david meet phillip again, the desperation (that you write so well) has me choked up all chapter then crying at the end.

i can't wait for the next chapter, even if it has me crying again!

you make me cry every time! the pain David is going through is gut wrenching! he needs Phillip to finction and he's alive! when he finds out he's never going to talk to katie again...it would be better for David to know that Phillip is comatose, atleast that way he would have a real person to talk to instead of the apparations. are the apparations phillip trying to tell David that he's still alive or just David's splintered mond not daling with his lover's death?

can't wait for the next chapter!

you are amazing at making me cry!(a good thing, you write the anguish so well) i really hope that Katie will finally tell someone who will tell David that Phillip is alive, he desperatly needs him...

i can't wait for the next chapter! thank you for these characters again