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| Matthew Jankiewicz 2008-05-04 ch 1,  | abuseGreat poem, especially for one that revolves around shoes. I really liked your rhyme pattern and yes...even your pun at the end. One of my favorite lines was when you said "Camouflage and leopard print--they were all made for me!" When I read this poem I think of my girlfriend, she loves shoes too! I'm not too sure though on the line "when you work for a shoe hole." but that's ok, overall, great poem. Keep up the good ideas |