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| XxXKristie marieXxX 2008-05-15 ch 1,  | abuseIts short with lots of emotion. Great job! xKristie Mariex |
| simpleplan13 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseI like this.. it's short, but it has a lot of raw emotion in it. The only thing is "i can't leave" it seemed odd since the reader doesn't know where you are or where you would leave to. Maybe I can't move might work better? Anyhow it's a really great piece. Nice job@ |