Reviews for Blessed Eternal Darkness

Starfire17 2008-06-10 ch 1,	abuseSimple yet elegant. Very well written.
rouquinamour 2008-04-12 ch 1,	abusepretty interesting!
Two Of Spades 2008-04-08 ch 1,	abuseis' coo' I didn't really like the way it flowed though, seemed a bit choppy/it would break then begin again, but the description doesn't...Anyway, thas' just me.
Nestalgica 2008-04-08 ch 1,	abuseThere's some good imagery here, but the flow is way off. I think that the frequent line breaks makes the whole poem kinda choppy and it doesn't really work for me. It makes the poem seems disjointed, more like a bunch of profound statements all next to each other instead of something a little more fluid, which I can feel it definitely has the potential to become. Some of the good images: "Concealing all we strive to hide", "Of pushing shadows", "Of hatred they walk"... but you've got some concepts in there twice or more: "Endless moments"/"All endless seconds", "In the shadows"/"Of pushing shadows". While repetition can be an excellent way to make a point, I think you could either embellish the repetition or somehow say what you're trying to in a different way. There's a lot of potential here, keep it up. :] -Max
The Reverse Edge Blade 2008-04-08 ch 1,	abuseI love your rhyming! More of it! More of it, it's cool! Again, a well-descripted poem, with a good setup. You're a good writer, able to put it down so people can take it in easily, so keep at it! The Reverse Edge Blade