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| MelodramaticFool 2008-06-21 ch 12,  | abuseDUNA DUNA! The forgotten sister! *pose* i like it! ^^ |
| MelodramaticFool 2008-06-19 ch 11, | abuseYay lol cute little ghost baby. :3 good chapter. but, not to sound like a ** or anything but its spelled lose. xD sorry i'm very anal about that otherwise yay! |
| MelodramaticFool 2008-06-15 ch 10, | abuseay nako...thats crazy. xD Well maybe everybody isn't as bad as they seem hopefully she can save her mom. ;o; good chapter. |
| AmberMarieee 2008-05-25 ch 1, | abuseThis is intriguing. I like it; this is a really good idea and a nice start to the story. I liked the first sentence, because it was morbid and disturbing in a good way, (wow that sounded really creepy, haha) and it hooked me. I also liked that in the first few paragraphs, you had no idea what the ** was going on, and just had to keep wondering and reading. lol. I felt like you could have built the suspense more, and maybe described a bit more, too, but other than that this is a quite lovely beginning. |
| Chelsea 2008-05-11 ch 5, anon. | abuseThis story is awesome from what I have read, keep it up! I can't wait to read the next chapter |
| Beast King 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseWhat an intense beginning! I'm totally adding this to my favorites. Update soon, please. I want more ;) |