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| Nat Nair 2008-04-18 ch 1,  | abuseThat event-alternation was a neat device, sort of like flashbacks but subtler - it kept up the suspense and made the narrative more interesting. A couple of sick puns there, haha. The lack of a clear motive for the culprit disappointed me a little though, it felt like a loose end - which is something a good mystery theoretically shouldn't have. But good job, overall. Keep writing! |