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| Nemonus 2008-04-13 ch 2,  | abuseThe first one almost contained that serenity which the best haiku have. Interesting choice of topic, which makes me wonder what I might write haiku about. :) The second one is the lesser, I think...the break between the first two lines is a bit odd, and it is simply descriptive. |