no, keep going. *pouts* :(

really great chapter- i got such a rush from reading it, so it was really enjoyable. just one thing though; it seems like some of the things that you put into the story are kind of random- like in the sentence:

The kingdom of winter was a virtual winter wonderland, something out of a twisted Disneyland.

i thought the whole disneyland thing was kinda weird- like... are they in a different world than ours or...? sorry; i'm probably being too picky. i can't wait to read the rest though!

yet another amazing chapter! the part about the funeral was really emotional and moving, and so real! almost as though i was in Ariana's place. also, i'm so curious what happens in coming chapters- please update soon! :D :D -

wow; this is a really good story so far. what i like about it is that it has all of the elements of a good fantasy story, yet at the same time, (maybe because of the dialogue) it seems very modern. i can't wait to read more! once again, really great job on this! -