Reviews for Questions From Logan

Sheliakena
2008-04-18
ch 1,

abuseIs that what you do in class now? Avoid everyone? Who are the people you talk to now?

.mate.feed.kill.repeat.
2008-04-09
ch 1,

abuseHonestly, I don't want to be mean, but this doesn't have feeling or anything to really catch attention, it has nothing to it that makes someone actually want to read it. The rhythm is non-existant and, chica, your grammar is atrocious. (Sorry but I just smiled.) You're obviously falling apart but you can't let your WRITING fall apart with you; that's the thing that has to stay strong no matter what. The thoughts are disorganized and scattered - in other words, they don't appear in any sort of order of events or logical order. They're just ...there.

Try redoing it tonight instead of burning.

I love you. And I wish you didn't hurt so much.
But please don't hurt yourself anymore.

-stix-

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