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| mangahottie740 2008-07-01 ch 1,  | abuseI liked that. It was beautifully written. Lol, I used to be scared when I went to sleep because I kept having freaky dreams. Nice poem! Mangahottie740 |
| a far better fate 2008-06-05 ch 1, | abuseWow. This is beautiful."The only reason we need to fear Is not fear itself, but waking up" is my favorite part. It's just so simple and perfect and thoughtful. This is really great! |
| Hanyou101 2008-06-04 ch 1, | abuseHow true... |
| Take the Money and Run 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseI really like this, and a lot of people can relate to it. I would add punctuation to it, though, because its inconsistent. Really, really nice job! courtesy of the review marathon. |
| xxInsanityxx 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abusei love this, and trust me you are not the only one who has felt like this because trust me i can relate! |
| Purpose 2008-04-15 ch 1, | abuseNice play on words with FDR's quote. I never want to wake up and when I do it's those first few moments that you dread the most. *shudder* Nice. I like, really relatable (don't know if spelled right). |
| jrsparkus 2008-04-15 ch 1, | abusei like this poem because i can relate to it. a mom with a drug-pushing boyfriend whos only activities are drinking and yelling, we (the kids) made our stand and out he went. sometimes waking up isn't the worst part, but the medium when your stirring from beneath the covers that scares you. |
| Peanuts Factory 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abuseBelieving in something... Sounds great but a very difficult thing to do. You're right, sleeping is a lot easier than waking up to reality. |
| silverscreen crush 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abuse"I know I’m a perfect tragedy" That was an awesome line. I liked the ending too. |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abuseI like this one a lot. The rhythm is stunted a little bit in some places, but the message is so true. Great job- keep it up! -Katrina Zeffirelli |
| Shasta Valentine 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abusei like this poem alot. however i wish you didn't force the rhyme as much as the meaning,if you know what i'm saying. but good job! --sv |
| script my heart 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abuseMy favorite lines are: "The only reason we need to fear is not fear itself, but waking up" I can relate to the line, and is difficult when we all we "feel is dead and gone" to get back in the mix. To feel again stings. To think though of how much we are missing out in life can help though. Take joy in the small things in life, and break free. ~smh |
| soccerfreak18 2008-04-10 ch 1, | abusei liked it. it was really good. keep it up |
| Thermite 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abuseSometimes it's easier to just live the dream. But remember, dreams can turn to nightmares, and depending on the situation, one might constitute that as much worse than waking up. Excellent piece. Thermite |
| silentscreamer07 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abuseWow..I'm impressed. Honestly..extremely impressed with this. Your wording was beautiful..the whole flow was great. The theme was just..wow. And i loved the last two lines. Not only did it end your poem just perfect, but..they were quotable! haha..sounded like john f kennedy towards the end of this ;) I really liked this one though. And i'm lacking words..because I lost my brain and creative flow. But I really like this one. Its my all time favorite one out of all you've written (i say it each time, i know :P) keep writing! |