 eamane tinuviel 2008-06-17 . chapter 1i love how you used different figures of literature, mythology, etc. and described their key characteristics.
very clever because it adds to your message.
i think you might have overused parallel structure in your last few lines (I am seldom understood/I am seldom misunderstood...)
but overall,
beautiful poem =) |
 groovi-gal-numba1 2008-06-12 . chapter 1wow ok when i first read this i was there thinking "what??" but you summed it up brilliently at the end
everything in this had a point - every line had meaning - which i love! i can't stand reading stupid poems with words put in there so that it rhymes
I am seldom understood
I am seldom misunderstood
i love that line
anyway - very good, i can definetly relate. good work :) |
 .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-06-12 . chapter 1This is an intriguing and beautiful piece. It is raw with emotion and simply a great piece. I like how you started out with characters from plays and such, then evolved to more general statements--the Wind, the Wtich--and finally finished with yourself.
If I had written it (which I obviously haven't), I probably would've separated each "I am" statement into its own stanza. It would read more logically for my mind, but I like how you have it as all one piece. Hmm.
Really, this is a beautiful piece. Great write.
-stix- |
 LadyBlood 2008-06-11 . chapter 1Ohh I like this one very much!
The best part is...Well I love the whole poem!
Just one ques...
The Artemis...?Do you refer on Artemis the greek goddess or Artemis Fawl?I love the books...
For The review Game...
L.B. |
 SickButPretty 2008-05-28 . chapter 1I liked some parts of this poem. It has a really quick pace, lively style. I don't like the end line for some reason, I guess it has been said before so seems a bit cliche. "My loneliness is my independence." Good line, know what you mean. |
 Hoodwynk 2008-04-11 . chapter 1In a concept, we in the English language do acompass Everything in the terms of one word. But isn't it really a concept; split by time and circumstances; but really only one thing; on concept? Just a thought.
I like the poem, esp. about Wind and Everything, as I haven't gotten around to MacBeth yet. Nice descriptions of charies. |