Reviews for Raspberry Smoke - FictionPress.com

Dot Cubed 2008-06-30 ch 1,	abuseYour poetry is too good for me, seriously. It's like practically perfect. I love the imagery and the idea of raspberry smoke as air and the sort of condescending tone the narrator takes. It's just so awesome. Fave line(s): "We love being hopelessly addicted/ (and twelve-steps take too much time)" p.s. hi! :D haven't talked to you in awhile
Chidori Nadare 2008-04-16 ch 1,	abuse...and we all do it anyway. I'm not really sure what to think of this but I sure love the representation of 'raspberry smoke' as breathing. This is going to my faves. Great job. -C.N
Jennifer 2008-04-10 ch 1,	abuseTHis is one of my favs of yours. I don't understand it all the way, but i get the gist of it. The best thing on here was/is the imagery. You're imagery rocks.
BlackestOpal 2008-04-10 ch 1,	abuseEverybody is doing it. This is awesome. The italics and the parenthesis really add to it. This is so cool.
Maraka of the Fae 2008-04-09 ch 1,	abuseI'm not sure how I feel about this. I really love the first couple of lines...but I don't see how "rasberry smoke" symbolizes breathing...and it seems...how do I put this...a bit novice to talk down saying this is breathing, duh...that's what it sounds like. Except for the "in-out-in-out" stuff, I really love the imagery. By using that, you could really rework this into an amazing poem.