|Reviews for the reeds aren't singing anymore|
| W. Griffin 7/31/08 . chapter 1
This is awesome! I love how the first and last two lines are so similar - good use of parallelism!
| a silenced revolution 4/10/08 . chapter 1
i like the imagery in the beginning, thought-provoking and dark. i also think the lack of capitalisation works well here.
however, towards the end, it gets confusing to me, and i don't like the lack of transition between 'they're dead in grey' and the next line. i think maybe a dash or a period would help this. perhaps that's just me.