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perpetual questions
2008-04-10
ch 1,
abusei like the imagery in the beginning, thought-provoking and dark. i also think the lack of capitalisation works well here.

however, towards the end, it gets confusing to me, and i don't like the lack of transition between 'they're dead in grey' and the next line. i think maybe a dash or a period would help this. perhaps that's just me.
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