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| perpetual questions 2008-04-10 ch 1,  | abusei like the imagery in the beginning, thought-provoking and dark. i also think the lack of capitalisation works well here. however, towards the end, it gets confusing to me, and i don't like the lack of transition between 'they're dead in grey' and the next line. i think maybe a dash or a period would help this. perhaps that's just me. |