it's a simple piece,

but i think i like it.

i really like how you used the words "pinpricks" and "labor"

though i think the ending "(like a mother to/her newborn babe.)" is kind of plain and redundant.

i also don't like the title much,

but this piece still is one i find interesting. the line breaks make it tons more effective.

nice job. -ty.

Excellent imagery. I like how everything flows. Keep it Up!