Reviews for Desert's Breath Ch 1 and 2

vase the girl
2008-04-11
ch 1,

abuse"shaking her all knowing hips" hahah, that's a new one.

I really love the tone of this story so far. maybe it's just me, but kay's spitefulness -- "I turned around at smirked at him, flicking my cigarette butt at his feet, which he danced around foolishly." -- is amusing. i like her character so far.

and how ironic was it that you named the slutty sister Helene, considering the name just always seems like it would belong to someone innocent and studious...

i'm going to end this continuous ramble by being a creepy reviewer.
CONTINUING WRITING I LIKE, CAN'T LIVE UNTIL I SEE CHAPTAAH THREE.

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