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Reviews For: Hindu Goddess

Scarlett Wynter 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseI like how you switch the tone from something joyous, to something tragic. this was an interesting poem. great work!
simpleplan13 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abuseI am so behind on reviewing.. lol baby face/one sucking her thumb and the other mewing softly... I'm a big fan of "baby face" it sounds like a pet name almost, plus shouldn't it be faces? or maybe baby faced? I dunno just a thought In the sixth stanza where you broke it up with semi-colons seemed bit odd to me... Other than that I really like this piece. The imagery is beautiful as always, but what I really love is the whole idea of giving birth to a human goddess and how glorious you make it sound in the beginning, but then change the tone so drastically. It's really great.
no.peace.los.angeles 2008-04-26 ch 1,	abuseI love the last line. It's so . . . epic. I'm not even sure what else to say. I love the way you manipulate words to your liking. That's what a true poet does and you do it very well. Keep writing! :)
she smolders 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseReading this makes me wish I'll someday meet someone whose words will leave the impression that your's do on me.
Lady Fingers 2008-04-17 ch 1,	abusemy favorite stanza you are truly a myth alive like a white marble maiden sculpted on her own sarcophagus beatings of the wind pluck my nostrils like a harp the harmony, of pregnancy, in the birth of a child
Faithless Juliet 2008-04-13 ch 1,	abuseI think that I have heard about this story, though off the top of my head I cannot think of any of the actual details. I think that this is interested, you portray your emotions in a good place, you see her more as a human, rather then a god, and I think that that is a powerful statement for anyone to make. I remember all of the stories about signs from God appearing on earth - there was a the face of the virgin mary on the side of a tunnel, caused naturally from rust and other materials. Anyway, several thousands of people turned that tunnel into a make shift shrine. It's one thing to see the religious aspect, and then another thing to see the histaria of it, but I think that a true on looker of such things can see both angles. And with this story, and your poem, I think that you've given both sides. I hope that that makes sense? I think that if this girl is revered as a living goddess that she will grow up and use that influence for good. She could become a strong religious leader for peace, or something. Anyway, I enjoyed this piece, I've missed reading your work. Post again soon. Much love, Juliet.
siphoned afterglow 2008-04-12 ch 1,	abusei like that you can take something from a newspaper and turn it into something beautiful, maybe there should be a newpaper where news gets converted into a poetic format-ah, sorry completely out of context. 'in the palm of your hand is beauty of your native soil materializing itself before her eyes' I liked this, native soil brings in nostalgia to me, vague feelings and pictures pass by in my mind. beautiful eyelashes blinking, all four, at once' its a wonderful thought, how ddoes something like that even pop in your mind. ;D 'macabre lens' why would you say macabre? i don't think it fit. the lens captured everything in truth. and why does the media and the father bow their head in grief. i thought they regrarded her as a reincarnation of the hindu god don't they? still, the part about the father is quite good. i love love love your last paragraph, its the best part. diddin for miracles like wingless rain' there your poet brain's geniusness comes out of you. stunning piece Julian. well done.
doxology 2008-04-11 ch 1,	abuseThis is amazing. I like the stream of thoughts and the new ideas about this beautiful baby/goddess born in India. I especially like the tenth stanza. "i bite my lip at your imperfections." Really, genius. Great job. Peace & Love westnedge ~> park

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