 dragonflydreamer 2008-10-18 . chapter 1I like your last line because it steared your poem away from the angsts that seems to have plagued the poetic world. It gave this a nice little twist to make it your own :)
I'm not too fond of the way you repeated "these days." I like the idea of repeating it, but it became too excessive the times when you used it two lines in a row.
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