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| painted.music 2008-04-12 ch 1,  | abusekonban wa I thought this poem was OK... until I got to the end, which is when I loved it. Those last few lines were beautiful: today, I want to learn everything like a six-year-old again before I slip and do a double take and become complicated again. Those lines -- loved them. Especially the first two. Those were my favorite. Learning like a six-year-old again. That's just... so innocent. Can I add those lines to my quote book? Ha det -Shan- |
| perpetual questions 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuse...it would be so nice to go back and learn everything like a six-year-old again. nice. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuse:) nothing better than saturadays |
| ilovetheopera 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuseyou'll prove more true than those that have more cunning to be strange. (paraphrased shakespeare) the last verse is a surprise, in a good way. it's a good ending to a satisfying poem; i especially liked the fourth verse (if you count the first line as a verse). though "the ink of nature filling me out" is kinda awkward, to me. |