Feel free to smack me for waiting for what feels like a year to finish reading this story ;).

Now that I'm finished, I hate to admit, while good, I think that I enjoyed Book One better. In this sequel, the dialog, writing, and punctuation fell short of what was presented in the first. The good part is that I was still able to understand the plot. I felt some sympathy for the newer characters but I don't feel as if I know them enough. I was deeply upset, however, over Keir's death. I'd like to see what's Kaie's mom's plan is. It would be nice if in the third book, we could get back stories on the other characters. Seeing more of the world of Deverell and its locales and races would be great as well.

I don't mean to sound like a jerk, and I'm sure that you have already planned the story out. I look forward to the available sequel and I thank you for sharing this story. Hopefully I'll get off my lazy butt and do some more writing of my own :)

I knew it, but why? Why did you kill him? Why did she just now realize that he meant so much. Why did you make it a tradgedy?! Everything he loved got taken away from him...even in death. I love how you made it so different from what Hollywood always does...but. God! He was so awesome and tender and...he loved her! And now that she finally realizes that she loves him back...she can't tell him. I wish you would have let her tell him...why didn't you let her tell him?!
Okay, I'm done venting. I love your books...they're awesome and I really hope that you write more. I different series would be really awsome. Though I would have loved for this series never to end. Thanks for these books...they've certainly made me think...and cry.

aw, you are a wonderful, wonderful person. If you hadn't put that last sentence in there I may have had to kill you after this story ended! haha So, at the beginning, I was a little worried when her friends hitched a ride thru the mirror, but in the end they entertained my greatly. example:
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“So, essentially, they were like Eragon dragons who talked like Dragonheart dragons and… they were made of pleather?” Leah reiterated.
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“He looks like Orlando Bloom.” Erin murmured.
“Oh dear god…” Leah muttered.
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“I heard something!” Leah whispered.
“You didn’t hear anything.” I murmured.
“I did!” she insisted. “We’re all going to die!”
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haha, very hilarious! on to read the third installment!

I haven't commented up until this point, all I have to say is "DEAR GOD NO!"

Sorry I've taken so long to get back online. It looks like Kaie and her friends have a thing for fantasy men, huh? Poor Erin but it looks like she's made a good ally in Ben. Hopefully Mattahias will get what he deserves, a good kick in the face.

Sorry I fell off the face of the Earth, but I'm back with a few broken bones ;). Lycaen seems like one great character. The guys who you can only hope are the good guys are some of the best. I know you like to put a twist on most of the races in this story. I'll love to see your take on werewolves.

EVIL CLIFFIE!

But YAY! Keir might come back! YAY YAY YAY!

Absolutely lurved it. Great chapter, and I can't wait to see what happens next!

Oh! That's so sad! Isn't there some way you can make Keir come back, can't Cerdwin do some magic or something?

But yay! Thomas and Vincent are back! I've always loved them, so it's great that they hadn't just dissapeared into nothingness.

Update soon!

Right, I've recovered from the last chapter, so I can actually do some proper reviewing this time.

I really like how Erin is finding new emotions towards Ben instead of Ellery. It makes her seem so much more real, and shows how appearances aren't everything. And Leah's reaction to Lycaen in his wolf form was very good, very believable and in character.

You conveyed Kaie's sorrow very well, especially at the end with the ring. The whole chapter was well written and very good. Keep up the great work!

Okay my review of 3-6. Erin falls in love fast and hard, huh? I guess if the guy looks like Legolas, what can I say :)? It also looks like Keir's decided he can't be too bad. Seems like Kaie's really skating a line between her friendship with Leah and Erin and Keir. I know it has to be building some conflict between all of them. I hope they can stick togther or it'll just get harder.

On the technical side, I'd like to mention that you need to be careful of making first-person written correctly. So far you've done good job of keeping Kaie's view unique to her thoughts and her sight. But sometimes I forgot most of the story was from her view but it could be that I was reading too fast. Don't get me wrong, I love that we get to follow someone else when you switch to 3rd person.

It's been awhile but I'm still alive just a bad combo of busy in the day, lazy at night ;). I'm glad to see that Leah and Erin have come to their senses. They don't strike me as closed-minded. I bet the year of fantasy stories has warmed them up to Deverell. I agree with Kaie, those unicorns were satanic and then some.

I like to give a little advice on the technical side when there's any to offer. I'm sure you know that there's misspellings but they're more common or maybe it's because I was unused to seeing them in the early chapter of the first Adventure. I wouldn't worry about them too much if I were you. They can easily be found and fixed with spellchecker if you have time.

You... you...

YOU KILLED KEIR.

Oh. My. God.

How could you do this? HOW? After everything, you just KILLED him? It's so sad. Too sad! Ahh...

I. Am. In. Shock.

The chapter was good, and very touching, but I can't really concentrate on that.

...

Still in shock.

I really like Ben's character; he's sweet. I was waiting for the moment that Erin realised Ellery was alive! That was a bit of a cliffhanger, with the whole one moment of pity was my mistake.
I can't wait to see what happens next, you upddate so fast it hard to keep up with the chapters. Still waiting for Vincent, but as long as the chapters are as good as these last ones have been, I think I can wait a little longer. Thanks for the update(s)!

Aah! How could you leave it like that? I need to know what happens!

Really great chapter, I love how Leah and Lycaens's relationship is developing. But I'm also glad that he didn't give into her request straight away - that would have been a bit unrealistic (and a bit of a problem, since she has to go back to earth eventually).

Anyway, I loved it. Update soon!

It's a sin that I haven't read this earlier. I love the first chapter. You do a great job of setting up and describing Kaie's friends. I want to ask if they're based on any real life friends. The way you wrote their conversation is amazingly authentic. Keep up the good work.