the repetition of certain words really works; three truly is the magic number.

the use of italics instead of quotes really works for me; it adds to the voice of this piece, the informal ease with which the narrator voices her fears and wants and her love.

it's beautiful.

everything you write is so real, so perfect without the use of a million metaphors to make it eloquent...you're my favorite author on here, you really are

The slices of life you write about in your short stories are always so vivid with emotions and they take my breath away too. Take care.

this is so simple, but so gorgeous =]
your description of her is really pretty, and the part about kisses in time with your heart beat is amazing.