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Reviews For: In the Doghouse

Moon's Poetess 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseIt's surprisingly spooky how well you can depict the mind of a child that age. Very well written.
ohthevoices 2008-04-17 ch 1,	abuseBoth the poem and the story were good in a really twisted sort of way, though I liked the story better because it gave more insight.
NathanDavis 2008-04-13 ch 1,	abuseVery, very creepy. I liked it.
Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-13 ch 1,	abuseThis is extremely sad. Heartbreaking, really. I agree that the short story is better. Though I like the child's voice in the poem, the story is so detailed and we get a better sense of what he has to deal with, as well as things about his mother. Really, I hated the woman. I wondered if he had only one parent - if he had any adult relatives living in the house - unless they accept her abusive ways or if they simply don't care/know. Either way, the situation is very sad. Your characters live through your writing, which makes this even more believable. I noticed only one typo in 'he imagined her snapped before dragging him up by the hair', where I think it would work better as 'snap'. Aside from that, this was flawless; I wouldn't change a thing.
Yellow skittles 2008-04-13 ch 1,	abuseOh thats depressing...Good job!
Faith Adeline 2008-04-12 ch 1,	abuseaw, how sad. I would totally just...** slap the mother. Le sigh. Great piece though, both of them. Keep it up, you're a great writer. Faith
burning in effigy 2008-04-12 ch 1,	abusethe boy is so tragically sad... makes me so frustrated at the mom, which is good because your writing is really really effective. i like the occasional use of imagery like "ust as a grayish blue tinged the sky" and how you talked about the snowmen and i actually see this more of a one-shot.. semi cliffhanger-y at the end, but it allows us/readers use our own imagination to fill in the blanks

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