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| losing gracie girl 2008-04-13 ch 1,  | abuseit's so sad and longing. yours until the wind changes, gg |
| fairytale failure 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abuseThis piece is really great! One of my favourites that you have written. I think I am in love with the last three lines. It's not exactly sad, but somehow expresses both innocence and jealousy - and it almost makes the jealousy into something beautiful. I don't like the wording of the first line that much; I guess the idea of beauty as a talent doesn't work well for me. |
| aprettywar 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abusethis is simple, but speaks volumes. lovely piece. keep writing! :) |