hehe... I like you a/n about the flames... anyhow...

I didn't like how you repeated the first line, though I'm thinking maybe it's a fp screw up? Also in that line maybe This nightmare might be better? Either way I love the whole nightmare/dream-catcher thing.

The first stanza seemed a bit odd to me... The phrasing seemed odd. The lies... that is what seems off when you read it out loud. Also the colon doesn't seem to work there either. Plus I think the rest of it is screaming for some periods.

The rest of it I really like a lot. All of the descriptions are really beautiful and well written. Great piece.