two words: confusing...brilliant

a/n: It's a secret.
Not anymore. XD

I really like this. I salute.

The third verse (or whatever) gives my brain expansion.

In-depth:

This is about lesbian lovers, no? I got that the 'lovers' aren't truly lesbians as there is no satisfaction and it was said, '...mostly just lust.' I liked how you called it a disease while stating earlier in the poem that 'we are pseudo-sick'. It's easy to follow because of the way it's separated and the punctuation works. It's well written as I didn't find an grammatical or punctuation errors.

The delivery of it when read out loud does draw questions how ever. With enough analysis I think they could be answered. My first question was: "Penicillin hands, what does that mean in this poem?" But after reading it a good four times I believe I understood it. It's part of the 'pseudo-sick' the hands are a cure for the disease. But if that's true why does it breed no satisfaction. The images this conjures to mind are two females trying to find satisfaction in each other but failing miserably. As if two women gave up on men who did nothing or very little for their sexual nature. After all who'd know your body better then another woman?

Why did you feel the need to specify that it was the fingernails needling. I feel that if you had left it at just nails others would have surmised that it was the fingers that the nails belonged to and it would have flowed better.

Overall what I got from this poem I liked it. My last question would be why is it a secret? I won't ask what the secret is because then it wouldn't be too secret if I knew. My favorite line was "Two openings cannot hope to enter one another." And the title fits. It leaves very little thought that it's about two women trying to find pleasure in one another.

Correction: It’s pseudo not psuedo.

If I understood this (big if there), I really liked it. If I didn't, I'm totally confused.

I'll pretend I did. I loved the allusions and the imagery and the word choice. It's very...underwordly appealing. Very...darkly intimate. Excellent work. I encourage you to write more.