I like the transition a lot. From wishing to be it and then not. The metaphor of the feather was also really well done and the descriptions were nice as well. Really nicely done.

I wonder what happened to your anti-freeverse side.

Not much to comment about, except that the line "That I am not that" is a bit awkward...what with ending with "that"...it just seemed a bit awkward and detached. It even starts with "that" already.

I'm not quite sure how your rhythm went, but when I read through it, my interpreted rhythm was a big jerky? I don't know.

Hey, at least your FP is alive. Mine's...

Dead. *pokes it*