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| Nemonus 2008-04-16 ch 1,  | abuseGood. It certainly has the feeling of breath into it, as if "the void" is lungs or sky (it doesn't matter which). "Bold" and "blue vacancy" are both well placed to create a realistic but exhilarating picture. Is this one intended to go with "Inhale" at all? |
| SheridanSpence 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abuseTruly lovely. I really like your choice of diction and the evocation of emotion it entails. |
| Brown Eyed Goddess 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abuseI love it even more than inhale. Wonderful. |