Reviews for Nothing Can Describe This

.mate.feed.kill.repeat.
2008-04-14
ch 1,

abuseThis is SO cute. You did really great with it. Some of the line breaks seemed a little awkward, but when the entire piece is read all the way through, it flows very well. You showed emotion and feeling really well.

I especially liked the first stanza when you said "I can't count high enough / to tell you the number of miles / I'd walk to you / if you needed me." That was probably my favorite line.

There are a few slashes \ in there that don't seem to have any purpose - editing mistake, perhaps?

You did really well with the ending, too. You really tied it together. Great job.

I'm going to add it to the "It's Worth The Ride" c2.

-stix-

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