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| Mystic and Masochistic 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abuseI like your perspective on this poem, it's impressive. I also like how you ended each stanza with 'black and white'. It's a good style to use! ~Isabel |
| XxXKristie marieXxX 2008-05-02 ch 1, | abuseYes that would make it so much easier. But Its not that simple. Love the poem, can defintily relate. Keep up the great work! XKristie MarieX |
| Sexy vampirechick 2008-05-01 ch 1, | abuseThe rhyme scheme was really good.It helped the poem flow well. But to fit the context of your poem,I'd prefer if you'd say black or white instead of black and white.In my opinion it's better that why,but you're poem IS black AND white..so.. |
| fleur de l'est 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseGood question.. This is where dilemmas come in, huh? I guess that's why white and black are my favourite colours. The rhyming scheme works perfectly, and the repetition of black and white is pretty effective. Well done :D |
| Misstress Nicole 2008-04-26 ch 1, | abuseNice. I like this one. Everything would be simpler if it was plain black and white. I like the way the poem flows. Although it's smudged a bit in the 'greyscale' line. Perhaps taking out the either would help with that. I like the punctuation, it's done correctly and doesn't leave anything to be desired. The redundancy of 'black and white' carries nicely through the piece. It centers on the point and leaves little room for confusion. Overall I think you did a fantastic job. |
| zerreitug 2008-04-18 ch 1, | abusevery well written,i really like the theme.i dont lik ethe fact that black and white is repeated so much but i guess that's what it's about. |
| xxInsanityxx 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abuseoh my god, i love this, it has alot of hidden meaning, good work :) i wish everything could be in black and white... |