i cant belev you dont have more reviews for this story!! its really amazing. the cast is great, and everything is sso detaild i can almost see it. it has the romanticisim but the adventure takes first priority. the only problems i could see was a few loose ends you never tied up. like the book and wha happened so that her family would acctually let her go for a few monts without contact, and not call the police. imizing story i just felt i needed to point this out.

Thank You^^,

Laruna

A friend of mine told me about this, and I had to read it. So far, I like what I've found.

You have a tendancy to give more detail than necessary, especially when it seems like you've run out of things to say. If you can't move the story forward with plot, then stop writing until you can think of something. It isn't horrid, it's just something I've noticed; just keep an eye out for it.

I like Andy's character, and how you seem to be developing her relationship with the other characters as if she were an actual person telling this story. You have a knack for writing, and I like what you've done so far.

Keep up the good work!

Oh, what's gunna happen next?

this totally sounds like it could happen to someone i like that its so realistic!

The edited version of chapter one is very well redone, and the second chapter is marvelous. You've left enough information for this to not be a 'cliff-hanger', but enough suspense to leave your readers wanting more.

You didn't tell me you were so talented; I'm looking forward to the continuation of this piece.