I liked this. It's full of different kind of conflicting emotions, talking about the things you liked and then things you didn't like, well done. I really liked this line, "Voice like the spring winds". Great job! :)

beautiful song good job

Even though i don't know what happend between you and the girl i kinda felt like i did because of your writing. Keep it up you rock :)

I like the way you express your feelings. But I must say that I liked your previous song better. The subject is a great one to write about, but I know you can do better. Curious on what will come next! Keep it up!

Love, Jolien

very cool song. One thing though, is that you state where the chorus starts but not where it stops or if there's a bridge or a verse. It all sort of just runs into each other. So that was kind of confusing. (to me anyway. and maybe it's just me :S )
but BESIDES that, I really liked it. I liked the short "sentences" like " Cute smile, beautiful eyes" and "Your voice, Your you" (especially the "your you" it added a bit of truthful humor, which was very refreshing.) Another thing that stood apart was the phrase "Unreliable like a bridge of straw" I thought that was very NON-cliché and I liked that. Good luck with this your Beautiful Demon!

This would be a nice song. :)

Nice, I liked it. =)

Hey,

I really liked this alot. I liked the simplicity of the phrases, like "Caught in your voice, your you". I thought that it was beautiful and I also liked the beautiful demon metaphor. It was fantastic.

I could definatly hear the song in my head. Was there a song that this is based off of, like in meter or rytham? I wish that I knew what it sounded like. I hope that you stick with posting up stuff. I love reading your work because you are such a wonderful writer with such beautiful, moving, emotive, feelings that are expressed in such simple. You are so talented!

Your friend,
Lady Alera
*hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug*

the idea of a beautiful demon is pretty cool, it's like a dark and rock song by the way

Excellent lyric, it's almost deceiving at points. Keep it Up!