Share/Save/Bookmark
Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search Login Register Extras
Reviews For: Beautiful Demon

5by5
2008-04-25
ch 1,
Even though i don't know what happend between you and the girl i kinda felt like i did because of your writing. Keep it up you rock :)
jojoba-music-girl
2008-04-17
ch 1,
I like the way you express your feelings. But I must say that I liked your previous song better. The subject is a great one to write about, but I know you can do better. Curious on what will come next! Keep it up!

Love, Jolien
little-chibi-girl
2008-04-17
ch 1,
very cool song. One thing though, is that you state where the chorus starts but not where it stops or if there's a bridge or a verse. It all sort of just runs into each other. So that was kind of confusing. (to me anyway. and maybe it's just me :S )
but BESIDES that, I really liked it. I liked the short "sentences" like " Cute smile, beautiful eyes" and "Your voice, Your you" (especially the "your you" it added a bit of truthful humor, which was very refreshing.) Another thing that stood apart was the phrase "Unreliable like a bridge of straw" I thought that was very NON-cliché and I liked that. Good luck with this your Beautiful Demon!
Rose Valentine
2008-04-15
ch 1,
This would be a nice song. :)
Beauty From Pain
2008-04-15
ch 1,
Nice, I liked it. =)
Lady Alera Van Hexis
2008-04-15
ch 1,
Hey,

I really liked this alot. I liked the simplicity of the phrases, like "Caught in your voice, your you". I thought that it was beautiful and I also liked the beautiful demon metaphor. It was fantastic.

I could definatly hear the song in my head. Was there a song that this is based off of, like in meter or rytham? I wish that I knew what it sounded like. I hope that you stick with posting up stuff. I love reading your work because you are such a wonderful writer with such beautiful, moving, emotive, feelings that are expressed in such simple. You are so talented!

Your friend,
Lady Alera
*hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug hug*
kloun mannequin
2008-04-15
ch 1,
the idea of a beautiful demon is pretty cool, it's like a dark and rock song by the way
Random-Idiocity
2008-04-15
ch 1,
Excellent lyric, it's almost deceiving at points. Keep it Up!
Return to Top