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| Zonne 2008-04-20 ch 2, | abuseWow, that's really amazing. I'm so impressed with how you covered so much with so few words. My eyes are teary. I'm sort of glad the next chapter isn't up yet... but I'm alerting this. Really impressive. Not all caught up in the details of the house, the environment, color of hair, etc... and you still paint a vivid picture. GOOD JOB keep going Zonne The review marathon - link in my profile |
| Zonne 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseAwesome intro. I can't wait to read more. One typo at the beginning. You wrote lased where it should be "based" One of those weird little things. The intro is great because, it prepares us, it lets us know not to worry about you (the writer) which is a relief for me. I also loved the little brother angle of it all. But it amazing how someone we've always loved and cared for will be there and be incredibly strong. Great job so far Zonne the review marathon, link in my profile |
| SleeplessRyuu 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseSeems interesting. =O I hope you get to writing it and get it done soon, 'cause I wanna read it. |