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| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-04-15 ch 1,  | abuseStrange, I think I wrote something very similar to this like almost two years ago, so it brought back some memories and strong feelings for me. Your emotion was extremely raw--I liked that. This was really well-written. The fact that you don't actually say who you're mad at (your parents, sibling, friends, etc.) makes it really easy for people reading it to relate to it. One thing I would like to comment on is that your ending is just a repitition of what you'd already said and doesn't really tie your entire piece together. Nice job. -stix- |