Reviews for Bed of Roses: Naqam

LadyRini478 2008-06-16 ch 1,	abuseThis was almost like a haiku. I really liked the imagery, very evocative yet concise. I enjoyed it.
Jesusfreak43091 2008-06-10 ch 1,	abusei like the first two lines. i think i might like the poem better though if i knew what "naqam" is the second line has 8 syllables instead of 7, but other than that syllable count is good and i like the format you put it in =]
simpleplan13 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abuseI like the format of this a lot and the phrase in the last line was really interesting and powerful. Really great job!
perpetual questions 2008-04-18 ch 1,	abuseinteresting, really interesting. i learned a new word from it. i think the middle line has eight syllables, though.
Untitled and Unfinished 2008-04-16 ch 1,	abuseReview Game: So I did like this, but it seems like it needs WAY more to it. It's a perfect stanza or part of a stanza, but I feel like that's all it is, I don't think it's a poem yet. Good job on what you have though
Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-16 ch 1,	abusePretty! I have a feeling this is based on some type of story, though as I'm clueless as to which. =P I think I'll look up 'Naqam'. The only thing I see here is that there are eight syllables in the second line, when there should be seven. Maybe you can think of a synonym for desire that has only two syllables?