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| naturalist 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseThe rhyme and meter flow nicely, and I like the shined/scuffed shoes contrast. The flow of ideas seems to be off in the last four lines though--didn't get "Will drop by ones and twos/Walk..." |