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| Andromeda Lyra 2008-04-18 ch 1,  | abuseI'm normally not into any sort of spirtual/horror story but this is very well-written. There was one thing that confused me a bit. No offense. It was this line: "See, it’s people like me, like my friends… The more interested you become… The deeper you get driven into their world… And the deeper you go into their world, the more answers they give you. You in turn, cannot be afraid… Whoever said they were on our side? The one thing I’ve realized lately: documentation seems to help." It was a little puzzling after the first sentence. Is the "they" referring to a new group of people or people like her and her friends? I don't know, maybe it was just me who didn't understand properly. Well, all in all, this was obviously meticulously checked over to get it to its current caliber. In reality, it's just plain wonderful. I just wanted to point out the confusion I had, though. |
| Neteri Bennu 2008-04-16 ch 1, | abuseI saw the summary and i knew i'd like this! and i did. If you need any help on the subject, i deffinatly can help ~ Dan |