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artificial destiny 2008-06-02 ch 1,	abuseoh goodness, what a ... depressing situation. ugh. stupid cora. *stab. i liked the narration, it had a nice flow and the story was semi-believable. hmm interesting name 'chirss' why two s's?
Dakota.347 2008-05-18 ch 4,	abusemy sorry about the writers block. Don't worry i'll wait just do tell me when you update or finnish a chapter! dakota
cls81690 2008-05-15 ch 4, anon.	abuseHey, I'm glad you've got other ideas, and I'm sorry you've got writers block on this story. Maybe, if you do want to fix it, you could just talk to the characters and muse over things and ask them what happens next.
HisFiestyBeauty 2008-05-14 ch 4,	abuseI love this story !! Its awesome, I cant wait for more chapters!
vio923 2008-05-14 ch 4,	abuseI like it. Unless I read it wrong I got the idea that Chriss is still dating Cora (10 years later). That seems weird. Julian must not be very smart if he committed a crime to keep his girlfriend Cora happy. Then she broke up with him anyway so that she could have Chriss -- or was she going out with both of them at the same time. While I understand that he did what he thought was necessary to protect her why didn't he explain it by now. Some things are not clear. Do you plan to explain them in later chapters?
x.kirai.x 2008-05-12 ch 3,	abusei like it so far! please keep it up, and update soon. :D
HeatherLee 2008-04-29 ch 3,	abusestill here and still reading!! im sharing a comp with my boyfriend and its the end of the semester so hes had to be on a lot. dont worry i wont just leave you hanging, i have only abandoned one story and i still feel bad about it... anyway, i liked it. it was a little short, in that not much happened at all. im not sure if ive offered already or not but if you want you can check out my beta profile and see if you would like me to be your beta. its up to you though, no pressure. good luck and update soon!
Dakota.347 2008-04-27 ch 3,	abuseI love this story. And for a beginning its pretty good too. A certain friends of mine have to read your story. The plot at the moment is pretty good, very original idea, for the moment i shall give your story a 7 out of 10 because i'm nice. Keep posting. dakota
Lady R 2008-04-23 ch 3,	abuseI don't see anything wrong with this chapter. I do hope that Lilly and Chriss will meet up soon, but then again, I probably am being a little impatient. Please continue.
Lady R 2008-04-22 ch 2,	abuseThis interest in this story is piqued. I hope you continue. However, I am having difficulties with their ages. Are you saying that Lilly was violated at 12 years old?! God, I hope not. Anyway, please update soon!
Zonne 2008-04-22 ch 2,	abuselot of medicaments in That sentence, above, the word medicaments should be medications I think WOw, now I'm into this story and it ends. pooh (as in bear) I like the bits of history and Hannah's understanding of her brother. Lilly 'disappearing' doesn't make much sense in some ways, I mean, her parents knew where she was right? Anyway, I'm nitpicking. I certainly hope you continue this story and update fairly often. Good job Zonne...
Zonne 2008-04-22 ch 1,	abuseWow, an interesting introduction. A lot of information, but that's good. It'll make the story flow without having to explain much. That Cora is quite a ** eh? I don't get why her "boyfriend" would do that though, unless he really didn't care about her in the first place (talking about Julian and Cora) Why would you commit a crime for your girlfriend? I know it is possible, but, seems unlikely. Something to think about. I hate people like Cora. Manipulative b... (i said it already) I'm in a bad mood because of someone LIKE her right now, so it's an interesting time for me to read this. bah Anyway, I didn't see any glaring errors in grammar etc. I'm interested to see how this goes. I need to go back and re-read to get the ages right. For some reason I thought their 'first' valentine together was at age 11 and then this happened at 12? gosh I hope not. Keep on writing. and if you feel like reading much less dramatic romance, I have some, but they aren't like this at all. TTFN
HeatherLee 2008-04-21 ch 2,	abuseAnother good chapter. this one had a few more spelling mistakes but if you ran it through a spell check you should be fine. i am looking forward to your next chapter and good luck!
HeatherLee 2008-04-21 ch 1,	abuseSo far so good I think. One thing is watch out for run-on sentences. The very first sentence in enormous hehe. Other than that, it might start to get confusing if you switch from having the narration in one persons head to another's. One other thing I want to mention is that the telling of Lilly's rape was OKAY, but could have been better. I think if Chriss had flashbacks of that night then supplemented his later knowledge it would have flowed better. Also, i didnt know "Cora" was a girl's name and it took me a minute to figure that out. the only part i would change at all would be the telling of the rape. it could be smoother. alright, off to the next chapter.
Waitingnotsopatiently 2008-04-17 ch 2,	abuseBrilliant chapter, yet again. Got me superly interested, worried about Lily, and feeling bad for Chriss. PLEASE update soon!!

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