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It was somewhat confuzing to read and understand, but you probably did that on purpose because love is confuzing. I like the hard truth that it takes many tries to find a knight in shining armour, but then again, everyone's armour has scratches and dents. Way to go!

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Ouch. This is a super-suck situation. I really like that last stanza about caring. I had to read it over a couple of times, and even then I had to think about it... I also like this poem because I can really relate to it (I think a lot of people can, unfortunately). I do like how you contrast you and your really caring with his not even bothering to search you out. It kind of suggests that something is wrong, and it really builds up to that last line.

-Naz

So sad, I like the examples you give of how he's not paying attention to her, they were written well. The last line seemed a bit odd to me, I don't really know why... "But if he really cared/ Wouldn't he care?" I think it should be something about how he would try to reach out, or make it seem like he cares.

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I like the examples of the ways he shows he doesn't care. I think my favorite is "I put on a song I told him I loved,
He tried to have a conversation with me." I'm not sure why... I think, to me, it just seems like the most obvious example of not caring, because she wants him to listen to it and he's just talking. I don't think I'm making sense today...

Nice question at the end. It sums up the whole poem. It's sort of got an obvious answer, but at the same time, how would he respond?

Good job with this.

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Wow- I loved this. I don't want to say it's a typical cliche... because that's not really true. There's a whole, somewhat twist to the poem. That makes no sense-- uh okay. I'll try again, haha. There was such a clear picture, yet there was a twist that I wasn't prepared for. Pretty amazing really. Because once you think you figure something out, it's totally different at the end. There's a girl, and she likes this boy, and this boy likes her, but wouldn't she mind that he doesn't care about her writing? Great topic. Awesome job.

You sound like you're in a lot of pain because of this person, if he's real or not. I can clearly see the contrast of each stanza, the first line being good about yourself and the second being negative toward him. I like how the lines aren't matching, that they are disconnected, if you will. I like the poem, but I hope that you don't have to go through pain to write any more that are just as good.

Very sad, but very well written. The contrasts are very similar to a situation a friend of mine whom I consider my sister is in right now. I liked it, and now I know what to tell her next time she asks me for advice. Thank you for writing this.

- Matt

''I wrote out my soul and gave it to him'' I loved that line. You had some really nice imagery and the flow was great. Keep it Up!