You sure do know how to write a short story. I loved how you led us along slowly with the woman moving through the train station and then put all your payload into the last paragraph. That did it for me.

I felt though that you were using to many brackets. Maybe you did it to underscore the fragility of the woman (fragility to the degree that she has to constantly remind herself of the qualities her man), but somewhere through paragraph three I started to notice them more than I should have.

Some of the descriptions were a little iffy for me. Not that I thought you weren't painting the station right, but more that you weren't painting enough. Or, well, not vividly enough. This whole thing rides heavily on the atmosphere of the train station and I think you would've been a lot better off if you'd developed that a bit more.

The leaves rattling off the side of the platform though--that was great. And the impact you made at the end was even better.

-Ochi

Beautifully written. The descriptions are elegant and drew me right in.

This is almost sad in a way, though the narrator seems almost indifferent and accepting of this long wait. For this reason I was reminded of ghost stories. Perhaps the narrator is a ghost, or this has turned into a ghost town and the narrator visits it to recapture memories after some type of tragedy occurred.

This story, though short, really made me wonder.

Wonderful work.