When I was reading, I thought that the lines were split a bit funky, but when I read it again, I found that I liked I couldn't think of a better to split them. When I read it a third time, I decided that it was absolutely perfect the way it was and I wouldn't change a thing.

In Summation: I really liked it.

I really liked the images in the first two stanzas:

"like the furled tongues

left by dead balloons"; and

"like the tide against the shore".

They struck me as being quite original and, also, powerful. There was a real sense of exuberance in those first two stanzas.

I had more mixed feelings about the final stanza. I find the image harder to relate to and it doesn't have that same exuberant feeling. The other images, although possibly a little ominous, seem like someone who just wants to experience the utmost of life whereas the last feels much more ominous.

So, overall, I liked the strong emotion of the poem but I was left a bit unsatisfied by the ending.

- Esther, currently reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon (link in my profile)

You have an awesome way of describing things.