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Reviews For: Under the Cherry Boughs
EyesEmphatic 2008-04-19 . chapter 1
A beautiful, impressive piece as always!
Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-17 . chapter 1
A pretty picture. I especially like the last line, 'as if crowned in reborn cherry petals'.

The only thing I noticed is that your repeated 'fragrant' a little too much in such a short poem. I rather like the term 'fragrant in their fragrance', but I think another word would sound better in 'fragrant voices, soft soprano'.
Perfumed, maybe? Aromatic?

Just some thoughts. (:
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