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Smackthedog 2008-05-10 ch 13,	abusenow i'm wondering what the government is going to do. By the way, ther are two paragraphs that are sort of 'cut off' Bright morning sunlight spilled into a dozen different colors through the Stained Glass windows of the small sanctuary and onto the red carpeted floor. The peaceful chaos of color filled the room, rendering the yellowed lights above redundant. White walls and dark wood beams curved over the silent room as everyone stared in shock at Gershwin. Rosemary had started to say how "cute" the alien was before her mother's And then the paragraph cuts to: hand was firmly clamped over her mouth. Even muted as she was, she managed a little wave at the silent creature standing next to Evelyn on the podium. the other one is: MacDaniels had no idea what was going on, but he stared with longing at the solid ground below them. He was sure he'd rather walk back down the mountain than fly there. Finally, the ground began to slowly rise up beneath their chopper and with a slight bump, they were down. Harnesses unsnapped around the cabin and soldiers Then cuts to: spilled out of the chopper in an organized pattern, leaving MacDaniels, Petros, and the pilot. Just thought I'd let you know Thank for updating! I've been waiting! -Smack
Smackthedog 2008-04-29 ch 12,	abuseYay! The Alien woke up! Now...what will it do? This story is really getting interesting, I like it a lot! You rock!
Smackthedog 2008-04-26 ch 10,	abuseThis is a really good story so far, well developed, I can't wait until you shed some more light on the alien. UPDATE!! Wa wa wa!!
InkAngyl 2008-04-20 ch 2,	abuseI like it. I don't have much time to read it right now, but i'll try to get back. (it's 10:00 and my mom is hassling me to get to bed) It sounds really interesting, and you are very good at describing things! Wish you luck, Ink
InkAngyl 2008-04-20 ch 1,	abuseI think this story sounds quite interesting... i'm gonna keep reading...

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