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| Clarelouise 2008-04-28 ch 1,  | abusesorry i jhavent reviewed this before! the title is very eye catching, makes the reader want to read on. i really love all of the descriptions here, its hard to pick out a favourite but i think it would have to be 'dotted with bright lights here and there, like cookie dough footprints of a toddler on black Berber', i love the cookie dough bit, really makes you imagine a small child! well done, a very emotional and well written piece :) |
| fictionluvr 2008-04-22 ch 1, | abuseGood job. Didn't quite understand the cookie dough analogy, but other than that, I thought it was really good. Very sweet and touching. As the wife of former military I can say that you captured the emotions very realistically. |