 Tranquil Thorns 2008-05-03 . chapter 1'The distance like knives' - I really liked that line. It conveys a feeling without you actually stating it. I like that it's done through a simile, an image.
I also like the short, quick lines. In a way, the rhythm is almost like a pulse. It may sound weird, or it might be just the way I read it, but that's a thought that jumped out at me.
Nice. (: |